10-25-2007, 08:53 AM
He sat there in that lonely and deserted garden his breath turned to fog as the koi silently and cheerfully swam through the large pond. The lotus twitched ever so elegantly while the shadows of the many clouds passed overhead. As he sat there his green kimono swaying slowly as he quiety sipped the sake. ''How indeed grim......And to think its all my fault'' spoke this quiet young man who looked only about 17. ''You musnt blame yourself you had no idea what was going on'' said an elderly looking man ''You simply cant blame her death on yourself Jin-san'' spoke the elderly man softly.
Suddenly The man called Jin arose and kicked the table over spilling sake on the old man ''Shut up! It was my fault I should have guessed!'' shouted Jin angerly just before storming off. ''poor poor Jin-san Saya-san why did you leave him?'' Asked the Old man as he cleaned up the split sake.
Jin quickly stormed out of the shrine and drew his katana ''You hear me you bastard Ill hunt you down and Slaughter you!''Promised Jin to the heavens.
In a shrine located atop a massive water fall a wicked laugh could be heard from benhind the massive curtian of water ''Mmmmmmmm how delightful poor little samurai-baka is coming for revenge what a bold action indeed'' said the two toned voice cheefully.
Thats only chapter one and Id ike some feed back please.
Suddenly The man called Jin arose and kicked the table over spilling sake on the old man ''Shut up! It was my fault I should have guessed!'' shouted Jin angerly just before storming off. ''poor poor Jin-san Saya-san why did you leave him?'' Asked the Old man as he cleaned up the split sake.
Jin quickly stormed out of the shrine and drew his katana ''You hear me you bastard Ill hunt you down and Slaughter you!''Promised Jin to the heavens.
In a shrine located atop a massive water fall a wicked laugh could be heard from benhind the massive curtian of water ''Mmmmmmmm how delightful poor little samurai-baka is coming for revenge what a bold action indeed'' said the two toned voice cheefully.
Thats only chapter one and Id ike some feed back please.