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Azkur_pt
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hi there here is a story I made for a book it is only a test so dont go jumpy on me... :lmao: :lmao: :lmao:

loool I hope youlike it....

The Soul drinker


This is the story of our beloved swords but not all swords, I am talking of the
mysteious swords sometimes called the Death callers, or heaven the demon Swords, they are the swords
enchanted with the power of drinking souls, and this hisoty is true it,
was given to me by my father as my grandfather did to him, this history tells the true meaning of drinking souls.


A long long time ago when making magic was as natural as eating, a man
remembered to make a spell that could contain magic on another bodys so
that is own body woudn't be tired by the use of magic,so after 20 years he found that if he stored magic force in
personal containers the magic force would't escape from it's container
so he decided to enchant a sword with is new enchant.


After enchanting his sword he tried to take away the magic power from a
living beeing, when he atacked the animal he saw the terrible thing he have done the spell would'nt only take away the magic force of the target
but absorve it's life force too, seeing this a terrible power imerged from his body and a voice came in to is mind.

The voice had a carismatic tone and he thaught he was going insane,
when he sleeped he saw is victim duing again but a voice apeared and said: bring me more souls
and I will not destroy your mind, bring the chaos to this world and
I shall not kill you, bring me power and I shall be known as Soul Claimer
and your name will be feared by many and loved by some, but do not try
to destroy me beacause it is impossible by every pice of me that is
destroyed another will be replaced.

200 hundred years and the spell hasn't broken the soul claimer still kills
and his servant still try to destroy the sword, there are tails that
says that he lives in the deep forest's of valenwood trying to hide is
sword from the living people, but has I said this is a history and
if you want to find the true you are crazy orc and you will dye like
an argonian slave, beeing servant of the sword for ever.....

and this is the story of the Soul drinkers.

P.s. As you may now the spell was spread trough the world and it is very used by assasins and
necromancers but as this spells are only poor copies of their father,
there is only one true killer sword the soul claimer...

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Was the guy called Umbra by any change? :D
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Well, Umbra was already in the original, so if so, then the guys sword will have to have been stolen or something like that.

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Well it could be the history of Umbra, no minfo on that in the lore right? Btw Azkur, Umbra was in the mountains north of Sudan(in Morrowind)
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Azkur_pt
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dont know man I writed this story only based on soul drinker spell and then all the way down is fiction you can change it as you want!!!!

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Don't worry Azkur, they are just having fun. It is clear that what you are doing is exploring the possibilities that the spell provides. It's not a bad theme, but you might find it useful to do a bit more research - preferably using an English version of the game - if you want to give your story full impact.

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One idea you might consider is that the blade be a daedric weapon - preferably a short sword of some kind (perhaps a tanto) as you want to make this an assassin's weapon.

The reason for this is that Daedric weapons are said to have been made from ebony infused by a process of extendd torture with the soul of a Daedra. And that might explain the 'voice' of the blade.

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Another possibility is that it is a Bosmer Bone Blade - there is a wonderful concept drawing of a bone blade next to a Cammorran sword in one of our threads that would make a splendid model for this.

So perhaps the Bone itself might have a history as significant as the rest of the story...
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thx raggidman my game version is the english colectors edition so e see no problem

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Hmmm.... your style of writing is interesting; more ingame terms and less "poetic" style. Good job!

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Eek 1 More like Portugenglish
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looool es muito mau :lmao:

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Hmmm, how about that old weapon in Morrowind, the Fang of Heykenaminawitaminamalsorwhatever...The only special blade made of bone I can think of.

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Right, found the dagger in Windy's Little Vector Forge...

Windy has done a render of this using a bland green colouring, but I still like it as bone - here is a link.

The Morrowind weapons all have a History behind them - but this is 'ours.'

If someone is willing to texture this as bone I feel it would make a fine complement to Azkur's story - which also needs some serious work! Hints...
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yeah man the story needs work but I have another story coming out and it is bloody Chaos

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I love bloody :D
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Check the Book Feyfolken in the Imperial Library - about a quill penthat cntains an aware and very active Daedra.
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Certainly an interesting spin on things. The original concept behind the dagger is more or less lost to time now, but for sake of insight, I'll dredge up what went through my head in designing the dagger, if it helps you at all.

The dagger started out in my head as a concept of a 'wing dagger', some kind of fey weapon crafted from the wing of a demon, it was originally meant to look as pieces of wing and membrane stretched over a bone framework. Following that, the concept changed to be more of a bone/ivory dagger, I kind of envisioned something made of a rock-like substance, the sort of color theme you'd see on the inside of an oyster shell, kind of like pearl but with a dash of color and a sort of rock-like look but smooth and polished, maybe just a touch of pulsating water in there to give it a sense of vibrancy and life. In it's current shape, it would probably still suit that purpose, however since the premise of its existence here was as a Leaf Dagger, that is how I presented the render to you guys. It's rather ironic that the concept has come full circle.

As for the story, I have a few suggestions:

Obviously, the dagger has the property of being able to absorb or capture essence of some sort, be this souls, spirits, whatever. Given the bone theme, you could possibly say that it strips souls from bodies as they die, tearing to pieces to feed itself. If you went with a more 'nature focused' motif, you could say that it absorbs the power of the waters that nourish the great forest, you could say it is a manifestation of the great forest's anger, it's will for vengeance and urge to lash out at those who have destroyed it's children (trees) perhaps the dagger feeds on this ambient energy (look at the forest as a single hive life form?). Just some suggestions for the possibilities. Either way, feel free to give the dagger as interesting a background as you like. I am after all but a simple modeller and trust me, I'm flattered as it is.

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Have you seen Mormacil's Concept sketch of the winged mimic from dance in the fire? Brew - it might be a talking dagger Wink
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